Prohairesis(Severus/Lily,Mr Evans) T
Quote from luke on June 29, 2026, 2:13 amAuthor notes:
I write this fanfic after i Realized child snape is should not be hated based on his adult life. No one is born a monster. We humans capable of cruelty and kindness, and we can strive to be better if we have kindness we got from other humans,either is from a friend,or from Adult Who sincerely Love you.
Chapter 1: A Living Bread
Summer 1968,Spinners end. Snape House
" Its empty again" Severus sighed while he opened up the food tent
"Hey,Eileen! Trying you freakish trick again!! There is hungry man in this house who need food!!!" Yelled tobias from his sitting position.tobias is all but is embodiment of poverty. Skinny,half a bald,and have cold brown eyes. He yelled from sagging sofa in middle of the dusty living room
The door clicked and Eileen snape came out of main bed room.
She is skinny woman with raven hair fall to the back and her eyes sunken but she didnt want to cower now. She reply coldly "how many i must told you Tobias? Magic cannot duplicate food. That's the law of the Gamp"
"Then trying it again!!!" He insisted,Spatted.
"I cannot!!"
They row and row . Severus slipped from their view and walked out of house. He didnt need them,Ge will find food on his own way
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The road He walked continue to less dust and have good painted wall. Severus then reached his destination. The Mr Bale potato merchant.
Mr Bale which is tall and have round belly with cold brown eyes and black short hair,unluckily came out of the shop of wrong time. He see Severus walked toward him.
His face shown disgust. That was make sense. When severus is shown in near his shop,there are loss 2 or 3 potato. Even thought it was small loss. Stealing still stealing.
"Oi kid.do you hear me? I dont want to see your face ever again after i caught you stealing once. You understand? "
Severus nooded.
Then severus moving to next target,the Wilson bakery far from apple seller near end of road. This bakery situation yesterday is not too crowded, he slipped past to the back of bakery,to place he know there are bread. The trashcan
The owner of Wilson actually see severus who took bread often from trash can . But he didnt say anything about it. He just dropped the bread to trash can after bread is already displayed one day. Fresh from the oven,the motto of bakery.
Severus then took from two baguetta from trashcan. Luckily owner always use plastic to not let bread touch trashcan. Oftenly he just go to the trashcan and his stomach is full for the day.
Severus then sit in near trashcan,eating the bread greedily from trashcan. At least his stomach will full for a day
At least he know there is one muggle scum that know how to not forbidden him to eat.
After eat, he then on his walk back to riverbank. It was his favourite place,to just lay down at the lawn and enjoy the sun while he using his mom blouse. No one is near him and no one is mocking him. Only Peace
Severus bypass the playground when he hear shouting of girl
"Lily,dont do it!!"
He suprised at the sound. The Playground only have 2 child. The child was blonde hair and the younger with dark red hair. The dark red hair girl throw herself into air,her expression show happines and freedom.....
She then landed happily, and took her sister arm and then say "okay then,i am hungry,lets go back home Tuney"
Tuney then just hummed and then they walked home.
There is no way.......
Is she a witch too.....?
But why her sister told her to not do it? As long as there is no witnesses,they can use magic how much they wanted......
Unless off course. she was muggleborn.....
For some reason,Severus face that always scowl turned into smile. Finally found a peace that he was not only magical children in this infested muggle town.
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The Evans House
The living room felt quiet after dinner is served and all of dishes is clean. Petunia is go back to her room and Lily sit down in dinner tabble. Her face in the table. Sulking.
"I miss dady, Mum" lamented Lily
"Me too sweetheart" answered Photinia evans,while cleaning the stove.
Photinia Evans She was perfect embodiment of beauty. Even in his 40 year of age she was still mistaken as 29 years old. She has thick dark hair,a long nose and blue eyes like her daughter petunia.
"When will daddy back home?" Asked Lily
"6 month later,sweet heart"
"Too long!!"
"I Know" said Photinia with her eyes down
Clock keep ticking,the sound felt heavy to lily heart
Photinia then clean her hand then touch Lily head gently "your father need to regain his soul for living.we must support him"
"Living? But he is alive right now!!"
"Yes,lilyflower,but i would told you when you are old enough,it was very long story"
"Okay" Lily smiled. Her mother always to be kind to her children,even when they become prat
"And Tuney told us you jump out of swing again"
Lily pouted again and look sideway "its just playing mom"
"Yes,but its dangerous,lily. I dont want you to get hurt. We didnt know if hurting like Eze again"
Lily grimace.that was time when Ezekiel, the children near the house trying to swing like lily and ended up being broken leg. Her father is so anggry about it that he grounded Lily for 2 month to never play.
"Just please dont do recklessly sweetheart. We didnt know what happened to you. Hope we find the cure" said Photinia. Her face show worriedly
"I am Not sick!!" Lily spat
"Yes,but we must make sure you are safe..thats all"
Lily then give little voice and then nodded. She then watched her mom clean rest of the house
"Mom,can i sleep in your bedroom today" asked lily suddenly,after seeing Photinia open the door to her bedroom
Photinia turned around and smiled "Off course sweet heart"
Lily grinned. She will not let her mother sleep alone again tonight.
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The Playground,Near spinners End
"I know who you are....." Severus breathing hard. Appear behind the bushes
"You ,you are a witch......" confessed Severus
Lily then show dislike face "thats was not nice thing to say to somebody!"
"No! My mum is witch. I am wizard too. I can show you" Offered Severus
"Wizard!!!" Petunia screamed, cannot contain her laughing. "I know who you are, you are the Snape boy from spinners end. The one who eat from trash can!!"
The flashes of hurt is shown into Severus face. He thought people didnt know. It actually gossip around town
"C'mon Lily,lets go out of him" offered Petunia,quickly Grabbing Lily hand. She didn't want to associate with "unnormal" people.
Lily then only look at severus then focus his gaze on Petunia back. Let herself being led by Petunia hold her hand steadily
Severus can only see Lily go away. Hurt that his trying to not be alone failed miserably.
He then going Back to riverbank. Just enjoy the sunlight alone is already a sanctuary for him needed for this day. At least the sun will never yell or whipped Severus. He just need to endure until hogwarts letter
Severus, never know tommorow is the day that beginning friendship of livetime, that he will cherished for rest of his life
Author notes:
I write this fanfic after i Realized child snape is should not be hated based on his adult life. No one is born a monster. We humans capable of cruelty and kindness, and we can strive to be better if we have kindness we got from other humans,either is from a friend,or from Adult Who sincerely Love you.
Chapter 1: A Living Bread
Summer 1968,Spinners end. Snape House
" Its empty again" Severus sighed while he opened up the food tent
"Hey,Eileen! Trying you freakish trick again!! There is hungry man in this house who need food!!!" Yelled tobias from his sitting position.tobias is all but is embodiment of poverty. Skinny,half a bald,and have cold brown eyes. He yelled from sagging sofa in middle of the dusty living room
The door clicked and Eileen snape came out of main bed room.
She is skinny woman with raven hair fall to the back and her eyes sunken but she didnt want to cower now. She reply coldly "how many i must told you Tobias? Magic cannot duplicate food. That's the law of the Gamp"
"Then trying it again!!!" He insisted,Spatted.
"I cannot!!"
They row and row . Severus slipped from their view and walked out of house. He didnt need them,Ge will find food on his own way
****************************
The road He walked continue to less dust and have good painted wall. Severus then reached his destination. The Mr Bale potato merchant.
Mr Bale which is tall and have round belly with cold brown eyes and black short hair,unluckily came out of the shop of wrong time. He see Severus walked toward him.
His face shown disgust. That was make sense. When severus is shown in near his shop,there are loss 2 or 3 potato. Even thought it was small loss. Stealing still stealing.
"Oi kid.do you hear me? I dont want to see your face ever again after i caught you stealing once. You understand? "
Severus nooded.
Then severus moving to next target,the Wilson bakery far from apple seller near end of road. This bakery situation yesterday is not too crowded, he slipped past to the back of bakery,to place he know there are bread. The trashcan
The owner of Wilson actually see severus who took bread often from trash can . But he didnt say anything about it. He just dropped the bread to trash can after bread is already displayed one day. Fresh from the oven,the motto of bakery.
Severus then took from two baguetta from trashcan. Luckily owner always use plastic to not let bread touch trashcan. Oftenly he just go to the trashcan and his stomach is full for the day.
Severus then sit in near trashcan,eating the bread greedily from trashcan. At least his stomach will full for a day
At least he know there is one muggle scum that know how to not forbidden him to eat.
After eat, he then on his walk back to riverbank. It was his favourite place,to just lay down at the lawn and enjoy the sun while he using his mom blouse. No one is near him and no one is mocking him. Only Peace
Severus bypass the playground when he hear shouting of girl
"Lily,dont do it!!"
He suprised at the sound. The Playground only have 2 child. The child was blonde hair and the younger with dark red hair. The dark red hair girl throw herself into air,her expression show happines and freedom.....
She then landed happily, and took her sister arm and then say "okay then,i am hungry,lets go back home Tuney"
Tuney then just hummed and then they walked home.
There is no way.......
Is she a witch too.....?
But why her sister told her to not do it? As long as there is no witnesses,they can use magic how much they wanted......
Unless off course. she was muggleborn.....
For some reason,Severus face that always scowl turned into smile. Finally found a peace that he was not only magical children in this infested muggle town.
**************
The Evans House
The living room felt quiet after dinner is served and all of dishes is clean. Petunia is go back to her room and Lily sit down in dinner tabble. Her face in the table. Sulking.
"I miss dady, Mum" lamented Lily
"Me too sweetheart" answered Photinia evans,while cleaning the stove.
Photinia Evans She was perfect embodiment of beauty. Even in his 40 year of age she was still mistaken as 29 years old. She has thick dark hair,a long nose and blue eyes like her daughter petunia.
"When will daddy back home?" Asked Lily
"6 month later,sweet heart"
"Too long!!"
"I Know" said Photinia with her eyes down
Clock keep ticking,the sound felt heavy to lily heart
Photinia then clean her hand then touch Lily head gently "your father need to regain his soul for living.we must support him"
"Living? But he is alive right now!!"
"Yes,lilyflower,but i would told you when you are old enough,it was very long story"
"Okay" Lily smiled. Her mother always to be kind to her children,even when they become prat
"And Tuney told us you jump out of swing again"
Lily pouted again and look sideway "its just playing mom"
"Yes,but its dangerous,lily. I dont want you to get hurt. We didnt know if hurting like Eze again"
Lily grimace.that was time when Ezekiel, the children near the house trying to swing like lily and ended up being broken leg. Her father is so anggry about it that he grounded Lily for 2 month to never play.
"Just please dont do recklessly sweetheart. We didnt know what happened to you. Hope we find the cure" said Photinia. Her face show worriedly
"I am Not sick!!" Lily spat
"Yes,but we must make sure you are safe..thats all"
Lily then give little voice and then nodded. She then watched her mom clean rest of the house
"Mom,can i sleep in your bedroom today" asked lily suddenly,after seeing Photinia open the door to her bedroom
Photinia turned around and smiled "Off course sweet heart"
Lily grinned. She will not let her mother sleep alone again tonight.
*************************
The Playground,Near spinners End
"I know who you are....." Severus breathing hard. Appear behind the bushes
"You ,you are a witch......" confessed Severus
Lily then show dislike face "thats was not nice thing to say to somebody!"
"No! My mum is witch. I am wizard too. I can show you" Offered Severus
"Wizard!!!" Petunia screamed, cannot contain her laughing. "I know who you are, you are the Snape boy from spinners end. The one who eat from trash can!!"
The flashes of hurt is shown into Severus face. He thought people didnt know. It actually gossip around town
"C'mon Lily,lets go out of him" offered Petunia,quickly Grabbing Lily hand. She didn't want to associate with "unnormal" people.
Lily then only look at severus then focus his gaze on Petunia back. Let herself being led by Petunia hold her hand steadily
Severus can only see Lily go away. Hurt that his trying to not be alone failed miserably.
He then going Back to riverbank. Just enjoy the sunlight alone is already a sanctuary for him needed for this day. At least the sun will never yell or whipped Severus. He just need to endure until hogwarts letter
Severus, never know tommorow is the day that beginning friendship of livetime, that he will cherished for rest of his life
Quote from mmlf on June 29, 2026, 3:47 pmHi @giftfromwanderland
Thanks for posting your first chapter here. Please see my post here for help on changing your title, and also see the guidelines for posting fiction here.
Here are two quick things you could do to improve your chapter:
- Could you use a capital letter for every name that you use? For example, 'Eileen', instead of 'eileen'.
- Could you use a full stop after every sentence, unless you're using a question or exclamation mark?
This will make things so much clearer to read!
I will also make a post elsewhere about verb tenses, so that we can get those fixed.
Good luck writing more!
Thanks for posting your first chapter here. Please see my post here for help on changing your title, and also see the guidelines for posting fiction here.

Here are two quick things you could do to improve your chapter:
- Could you use a capital letter for every name that you use? For example, 'Eileen', instead of 'eileen'.
- Could you use a full stop after every sentence, unless you're using a question or exclamation mark?
This will make things so much clearer to read!
I will also make a post elsewhere about verb tenses, so that we can get those fixed.
Good luck writing more!
Quote from mmlf on June 29, 2026, 5:41 pmMy verb tense help posts are here @giftfromwanderland
My verb tense help posts are here @giftfromwanderland



